The Romance Diagnostic (Deposit)
$200
PLEASE NOTE: The price of the diagnostic is based on your final word count. Today, you pay a reservation deposit. I will reach out to discuss your draft and final pricing based on your word count.
What you’ll walk away with:
An Editorial Letter: Big-picture feedback on the strength of the romance arc, character motivations and emotional depth, conflict/stakes/tension, and pacing. You’re welcome to guide me toward any specific areas you’d like me to focus on in this feedback.
A Romance Rubric: An at-a-glance "romance health scorecard" with categories like chemistry, motivation, and emotional payoff rated on a scale of 1-5.
An Action Plan: A list of 3–5 prioritized recommendations to strengthen your romance and guide your next round of revisions.
Who this is best for:
Writers worried their romance isn’t hitting emotionally
Authors wanting clear, actionable feedback without a full edit
Anyone needing confidence in their story’s chemistry and stakes
Not sure this is the right fit? If your book is still in the outlining or structural phase, you may get more value from an Outline Diagnostic instead.
Pricing
up to 50k words – $500
50k–74k words – $675
75k–99k words – $825
100k–124k words – $1,000
125k–149k words – $1,175
150k and over – custom pricing
Add-Ons
30-minute diagnostic debrief video call – $75
In-Line Comments - Pricing based on word count
Eden St. John
Working with Marjorie was a dream. She not only KNOWS romance but, more importantly, it’s clear she has a deep love and respect for the genre. Sometimes people on social media will sell you their services and you only learn it’s a grift after you’ve wasted your money, but that couldn’t be further from my experience with Marjorie. The Romance Diagnostic and accompanying edit letter were equal parts encouraging and helpful. Her feedback was thorough and detailed, and though I didn’t request a follow up zoom call at first, she let me add that on after I received the deliverables and I’m so glad I did. Marjorie’s expertise helped me make my manuscript stronger and has given me the confidence to go forward with querying literary agents. If you have done about as much as you can with critique partners and beta readers and you’re looking for a fresh, experienced set of eyes to help you make your manuscript really sing, you will not regret booking the Romance Diagnostic with Marjorie!
Jacq Parairo, author of Love on a Deadli
Thank you so much for all the wonderful things you said! You don't know how much I cherish those words. I hardly see any good in my work most days, and you have truly bolstered my confidence. I'll definitely be referring back to your feedback when I'm feeling down about my work. Overall, this was a truly insightful experience. Not only did you help make my characters shine, but you also addressed my weak points while motivating me and fueling my creativity.
Katherine Rothschild
The romance diagnostic was an essential tool to help me with late stage revision on my rivals to lovers romance. Marjorie’s approach helped me break down the revision process and give me focus. I’m extremely happy with the results!